Writing assignment1

NAME: WANG TIANREN (APPLE)
Martic NO.: U086069E
GROUP: E06
TUTOR: MS KHOO SIM ENG
Writing Assignment 1
Paragraph 1: Cause and Effect -- Why people resist new technology 
Rewrite :
The high price of high-technology products is one of the reasons that people resist new technology. As new technology is at the beginning of its development stage, it does not have as much infrastructure as other industries. The products of new technology are normally more expensive than other products. For example, solar energy is a new technology. Consequently, solar energy’s price is about 5 to 20 times higher than other energy sources (Solar Energy: Competitive Positioning by each Market Segment, 2006, para1). There are four factors that cause the high price of high-technology products. The first factor is the high price of the patent. As new technology has not been applied in daily life for a long period, the producers must pay a high price to get the patent. The second factor is the high cost of new installations. New technology is different from existing technology and requires specific equipment. The producers may need to spend much money to make this specific equipment. That leads to another factor, which is the high cost of educating workers. Since the machines are new, most of the workers have not used them before. Hence, the producers have to pay a lot of money to educate their workers and train them so that they work efficiently. The fourth factor is the high cost of advertising. Since most people are not familiar with the new technology, the producers have to put out many advertisements to popularize their products. While this is effective, it is also expensive. In conclusion, the high price is a great obstacle for people to accept the new technology.

References:
 Solar Energy: Competitive Positioning by each Market Segment (2006). Retrieved 01 Sep, 2008, from http://www.solarbuzz.com/StatsCosts.htm

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W5T2 Grammar Mistakes

One of my common grammar mistakes is sentence fragment. I always write incomplete sentences when I write my essays. According to Writing Academic English (Oshima A, Hogue A, 2006, P183), the key to solve this problem is to remember that a complete sentence must contain at least one main or independent clause. Refer to Writing Academic English, “an independent clause contains a subject and a verb and express a complete thought” (Oshima A, Hogue A, 2006, P163). For example, “I am writing my assignment.”, it is a independent clause. Another key to avoid sentence fragment is to pay attention to the sentences with subordinators, such as although, since, because, if, before and so on. Make sure that every clause beginning with these words is attached to an independent clause. For instance, “Before we make the detailed plan, we need some more facts and figures.”, it is a sentence with correct usage of “before”. As I hold to the tenet that theory should be united with practice, I will do some exercise then. 

Practice: to correct the followed sentence.

1. Everybody in this village know, April fond of hunting.

Right: Everybody in this village knows that April is fond of hunting.

2. To study a foreign language, a good dictionary should be bought.

Right: To study a foreign language, we should buy a good dictionary.

3. Finishing my composition, I had nothing to do.

Right: Having finishing my composition, I had nothing to do.

4. Sailing on and on, a new island was discovered.

Right: Sailing on and on, they discovered a new island.

5. He succeeded because had work hard.

Right: He succeeded because he had worked hard.

All in all, the structure of the sentence is very important. We can pay attention to it.